Jak And The Prisoner

Samantha913 · Posted: Fri Jan 13, 2006 9:13 pm Post subject:

Title: Jak and the prisoner
- Rating Pg- some vilance and some swering
- Type fanfic
- Category Game (The Jak adn Daxter trillagies)
- Genre Fantasy, romance (a little) action, adventure
- Pairing Jade (my oc) and Jak
- Summary
Jak meet a prisoner who has been injected with something werd eco from the Crimson guards.

(there's 4 parts but there still good

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VincentValentine13 · Posted: Tue Jan 17, 2006 4:06 pm Post subject:

Okay, I didn't read all of it, just the first chapter, but I'll still give my review. Okay, for one, you might need to check your grammar and spelling. I only say this to help, because people will get upset. And, on the same subject, I may be wrong, but isn't it Daxter, not Dexter? However, on the good side, you kept the energy up very well, which can be a big problem for some. Now, this is just a forewarning...be careful. Having a person like your OC gets our kind(the OCers of the world) into so much trouble and hate. Avoid a mary-sue at all costs! This can get people to report you, so make sure that there are weaknesses! Still, I only read the first chapter, so maybe you took care of that already! Don't forget about Butterfly...I'm having a lot of fun!

P.S. Check out my story: Who Am I. It's in the post just under my name!
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Samantha913 · Posted: Thu Jan 19, 2006 6:22 pm Post subject:

I'm not very good with grammer and spellings but I do try my best, and what the heck are mery-sue's :huh:
Not having a lot of energy in it is hard for me, I'm always so hyper, cept right now, Ok, I'll read it
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VincentValentine13 · Posted: Thu Jan 19, 2006 7:00 pm Post subject:

(acts very scholarly) A Mary-Sue, or Gary-Stu in the case of a man, is an original characetr that is placed into a fanfiction that has super powers, is smarter then all the characters....well, is basically perfect. People hate this, so you have to be careful. My character is like that, and I've been trying to avoid this as best as possible.
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Samantha913 · Posted: Sat Jan 21, 2006 6:46 pm Post subject:

Ohh that, I try to stop and sometimes do it when I don't even notice it
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Alpha_zero · Posted: Mon Jan 23, 2006 9:53 am Post subject:

This was on shadow hearts...Cool, I rad it there and it rocked. Pity you never bother to check out the fanfiction I put there... <_< But anyway, its really good, but with the mary-sues Vincent has a point.
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Samantha913 · Posted: Mon Jan 23, 2006 2:21 pm Post subject:

I didn't do that....did I :huh: Some times I do it with out relising it or meaning it/
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