Rate The Story Above Yours

[n8comics]

Lets play a little game. This is exactly the same as Rate the Picture Above Yours except for the fact that it's with stories! The stories can be anything, Yaoi/Yuri, comedy, fanfiction or just a story you made up. For the more explicit ones however, try to post a warning on it eh? Anyway, you post one of your stories (link to a story that is) and then the next user rates it and or gives it a comment here on the forum. Then post one of your pictures and continue on with the same pattern. (This beats wiating weeks for one comment too.)
Ok I will start:
Fast Food Etiquette

The story (well, article...) above contains some language that may not be suitable for younger audiences or 80 year old Mormon-Catholic grandmas.

[xWildfirEx]

Ok, I'll give it a 3/5.

[quote]it is like stupid in surround sound[/quote] i don't get this one... and

[quote]All the other employees of fast food I have met are just as pissed and angry.[/quote]

Fast food employs people? O.o

Here's the first chapter of my Gravitation fanfic

[Stratadrake]

If I had any clue what it story was about, I'd be able to give it a fair rating. As it stands though, I have to default to giving it a neither-good-nor-bad three, out of five.

I only read the first chapter. I could have read more, but it might be unfair to ask each person to read/comment on an ENTIRE story -- as some stories get quite long.

One sentence did strike me as odd though:

[quote](Name.) gives a slight kick to my ribs, and I cry out again.[/quote]

I have to wonder why you did not simply use the pronoun "they" in this sentence.
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[xWildfirEx]

Ai! Sorry 'bout that! I wasn't sure of the spelling of that character's name, so I had to go and check. I checked it, but I only corrected in one of the lines where it was mentioned. I forgot the other. my bad.

[nekojess]

well, since the line kinda stopped, I'll start a new one.

Here's my Harry Potter Marauders story.

click here.

[n8comics]

[quote]Fast food employs people? O.o[/quote]
No, of course not... They just employ us Mexicans to do their s**t for them We're not worthy I suppose to be called "people."

[LadyoftheDeadlyDance]

Alright, I've read three chapters of Eyothindiel's Harry Potter fic, and so far I'll give it a 4/5. ^-^ It's very interesting, and well written, I like the descriptions you provide.