story ; pokemorph, please critique

aquaeevee

please give my story critique. just be polite about it for gods sake.
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Stratadrake · Posted: Fri Oct 17, 2008 5:23 am Post subject:

A quick summary and URL to the story in question would be nice.
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aquaeevee · Posted: Fri Oct 17, 2008 2:14 pm Post subject:

my bad, can do bossman
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aquaeevee · Posted: Fri Oct 17, 2008 2:18 pm Post subject:

team rocket has been up to its old tricks again and created pokemon morphed with humans to create a new breed of trainer. this goes very wrong. Now the mewmorph Meka must do whatever is nessasry to stop this new threat to the pokemon world...

please understand that im still introducing the characters and still have 2 or 3 more to introduce in this book which is currently on an inbound flight to chapter 4

http://www.fanart-central.net/story-50734.html
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with this frame of mind you better pray i never get a point of view gun, too late i just did. just pray i dont aim at you then!