Tips on this one, pls

unfocused · Moderator Joined: 17 Jul 2004 Posts: 6983 Location: Texas

I posted this on another forum for some help, and got a nice redline, but I don't agree with some of it. That forum is super slow so I'm hoping for more help here. I'll post that redline to.

[img]http://i4.photobucket.com/albums/y112/unfocused/Camgirlcolorpreview3.png[/img]
I've edited the shoulder already. But I still need help with other proportions. I know, I'm far from finished, but I want to get the anatomy right before moving on.

[img]http://i4.photobucket.com/albums/y112/unfocused/72903_Camgirl_122_42lo.jpg[/img]
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SweetxinsanityxSarah · Posted: Mon Nov 16, 2009 2:30 pm Post subject:

Face, hair, and hands wise it looks really good but the legs are a wiiii bit too thick. Other than that excellent job on the shading and other anatomy parts. n_n
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London · Moderator Joined: 23 Mar 2006 Posts: 6474

Move her knuckles to our right a bit. I think the lines for the top of the head/face should be somewhere between yours and the redline. Nostrils too far apart. Mouth too small. Is the line defining her face (on our right) the edge of her face or is hair covering it? If it's not hair, then move that to our right and maybe add an ear. Fingernails. The width of the strap on her top should be thinner. Her boobs look awfully high for someone not wearing a bra. I would have her chest slope down a bit at the top before getting to her boobs. Her torso looks a tad too short. Leg thickness looks alright to me. Her eyes look a little weird. Try moving the inner corners down a bit. I agree with the finger length edit.
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unfocused · Moderator Joined: 17 Jul 2004 Posts: 6983 Location: Texas

Thanks, London and Sarah. I took some advice, but lost interest in the drawing pretty quick. I added an oversized, opaque crop of the image as a background, but decided that was used too much in pinups. BUT, I did like the way it looked cropped at the top. So I decided to keep that in.

Here's the finished version http://www.fanart-central.net/pic-775607.html
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SweetxinsanityxSarah · Posted: Wed Dec 09, 2009 12:26 am Post subject:

Hey np always there to help out a fellow artist in need nn
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