The Combine Of Sin

[Astri]

Hello again. This is a fanfic that I wrote in one night, and I feel proud of it, but also kind of like I have to improve it. So I was wondering if anybody would read this and let me know what they think.

- Title: The Combine of Sin
- Rating: PG-13 ~ R--a bit violent, rather obviously anti-religious, and based around a shonen-ai/ yaoi romance
- Type: Fanfiction
- Category: Maze: The Mega-Burst Space. However, I hope very much that whether you've seen Maze or not, you can still appreciate this fanfiction. It happens about a decade before the anime, and I honestly think that prior knowledge of the series is unnecessary for the fanfic.
- Fantasy, Romance
- Jipha + Sai (original character)
- A fanfiction describing the life of a young man named Jipha, before he was ensnared by the evils of the Jaina Holy Group and transformed into a ruthless assassin.

This fanfiction is about six pages long, which is pretty short for me, so...I hope I manage to hit everything I needed to in it. Please, let me know.

The Combine of Sin

Thank you very much for your time.
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[Nilitac_Tesgrah]

I haven't read the whole thing, just the first chapter, but wowie. I feel so bad for Jipha. :(

EDIT: I went back and read it again, then I realized it was just one chapter. :wacko:
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Interesting....