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Megamangaman Newb
Joined: 08 Aug 2005 Posts: 2
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Posted: Wed May 24, 2006 6:10 pm Post subject: My Pokemon fanfic |
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My fanfic is a pokemon story titled Ray's first pokemon. I've think I've got a good storyline: A boy named Ray with his brother and his friend travel go on a quest to be a pokemon champion. So far i've got six chapters, and I'm working on the seventh. |
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Astri How can I get a custom title thing?
Joined: 30 Dec 2005 Posts: 912 Location: Valencia, CA
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Posted: Wed May 31, 2006 7:00 pm Post subject: |
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It helps if you put a link to your story, so other people can read it... ~.^ _________________ [color=blue]Disgaea's [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-31977.html]Overlords Dance[/url] in [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-25745.html]Worlds Beyond Infinity[/url] while [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-27428.html]Mifuyus Magical Multiplying Mole[/url] reads the epic [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-25652.html]Chronicles of Yord[/url], and you learn that your [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-37925.html]Craving[/url] for [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-37922.html]Finding a Heart of Snow[/url] is [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-37924.html]Taboo[/url] in [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-37910.html]VG[/url] unless you dare undertake [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-32962.html]The Combine of Sin[/url]...[/color] |
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Megamangaman Newb
Joined: 08 Aug 2005 Posts: 2
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Astri How can I get a custom title thing?
Joined: 30 Dec 2005 Posts: 912 Location: Valencia, CA
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Posted: Thu Jun 01, 2006 10:00 am Post subject: |
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I've only read the first chapter so far, but here's what I have to say:
Pros: The storyline is solid, and you have a good sense of humor. It moves along briskly and keeps you going, and stays humorous at the same time.
Cons: Grammatically and structurally, it has some issues.
I think you need help editing your fanfic, but the meat of the story beneath the words is quite good. I like it ~.^ _________________ [color=blue]Disgaea's [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-31977.html]Overlords Dance[/url] in [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-25745.html]Worlds Beyond Infinity[/url] while [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-27428.html]Mifuyus Magical Multiplying Mole[/url] reads the epic [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-25652.html]Chronicles of Yord[/url], and you learn that your [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-37925.html]Craving[/url] for [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-37922.html]Finding a Heart of Snow[/url] is [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-37924.html]Taboo[/url] in [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-37910.html]VG[/url] unless you dare undertake [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/story-32962.html]The Combine of Sin[/url]...[/color] |
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Bulletproofskunk Rookie
Joined: 11 Mar 2006 Posts: 36 Location: under your nose
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Posted: Sat Aug 05, 2006 12:05 am Post subject: |
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nice! i havn't seen many good pokemon stories . but as astri said a little work on your grammar and you're a for away |
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