My fanfic

[Malexos]

Can someone at least READ my fanfic? I was hoping for someone to critique it, but I've had it on several other fanfiction sites for 1 week, and nobody's even read the damn thing

Here, enjoy:

http://www.fanart-central.net/story-35274.html
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[Astri]

Well, better get used to that. It takes forever for people to read stories --.--

Anyways. For the most part, I like your story. It has an interesting beginning--it kind of hooks you into wondering what's going on. It's kind of short, but that's okay for an introduction. I very much like the [b]questions in bold[/b] that you put. They give you an understanding of Luxan despite knowing nothing about him.

You have some mild capitalization and spacing errors, but nothing major. If you post this link again in the Spelling/ Grammar Help thread, I can show you where and you can fix them. Your spelling's really good, though, and that's wonderful.

Overall, it's a great beginning. Now continue on. I wanna see what you can REALLY do ~.^
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