Demon's Heart - Second opinions?

Some_Dude · Newb Joined: 07 Apr 2005 Posts: 15 Location: Suburbia

- Title: A Girl Named Neiru
- URL:[url]http://www.fanart-central.net/story-37235.html[/url]
- Genre: Fantasy>>Spirits/Deities>>Demons
- Summary: A teenage boy unkowingly falls in love with the demon girl bent on killing him. Yup, that about sums the story up. No world-saving. Just a lack of common sense.
- Advisories: a little nudity and sexual jokes/situations(but nothing really bad), quite a fair amount of violence

I would really appreciate any comments you may have on my story. Especially if there is something like a hole in the plot. Your opinion would be very, very, very helpful!
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Some_Dude · Newb Joined: 07 Apr 2005 Posts: 15 Location: Suburbia

Is this story just uninteresting? Does nobody want to read it? I mean, I've had this up for...a while... So if you have anything [u]at all [/u]to say, even if it's "go away this story is stupid", say it for crying out loud!!!
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NicholasDWolfwood · Posted: Mon Oct 09, 2006 1:14 pm Post subject:

I think people just aren't intrested. Maybe you could Describe the plot in more detail?
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Some_Dude · Newb Joined: 07 Apr 2005 Posts: 15 Location: Suburbia

Fine... even though I basically laid out the entire story the first time minus the ending...

The demon girl (Neiru) is basically dropped into the main character's (Kojo's) life. After Kojo survives Neiru's attempts to get rid of him, Neiru decides she might as well make use of him since he knows about her. And so he gets wrapped up in her many century-long quest.

Happy Now? Exactly 50 words...
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