Humanity among Demons-give me teh critiques plzzzz

maxinator · Newb Joined: 22 Oct 2006 Posts: 14

-Title: Humanity among Demons
-URL: http://www.fanart-central.net/story-40304.html
-Summary: A mysterious boy is found outside the Leaf Village. Tsunade sends Naruto, Sakura, Kakashi and this new mystery ninja on a mission to the Lightning Country in
search of this boy's sensei.
-Content Advisories: Contains some strong language but nothing too serious. There's some violence (more so in later chapters) and some blood, but again, nothing too serious.
-Series: Naruto (takes place during the filler portion of the anime series, but the difference is that this doesn't suck Razz

)
-Pairings: none (may change in later chapters)

The story is still in the process of being written but quite a few chapters are up. I would appreciate any sort of changes I should make to improve it and help it to appeal more to the masses. Also, any comments you have are welcome!

kittyshootingstar · Posted: Sun Feb 11, 2007 7:33 pm Post subject:

This story is very good. The description and dialog let me imagine the scenarios in my mind. Your writing style is similar to some I have seen in well-known books. On top of this, you came up with an amazingly gripping story. I can't wait to read the next chapter; this story has kept me on the edge of my seat since chapter one. Really, I fell off a few times I was so on the edge of my chair. Great job, and keep up the awesome work!

SilverKitsune · Posted: Sun Feb 11, 2007 8:51 pm Post subject:

4/10

But that's just me.

excellent writting style though.
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maxinator · Newb Joined: 22 Oct 2006 Posts: 14

Any reason why it's 4/10? I would like to know so that, hopefully, I can improve a bit.