tell me what you think of it...

[Lionhearts]

It was a very tragic night
When him and her
Both saw the light
You see,
He was getting very stressed
It was both causing them
To get clinically depressed
Everyday he would come home and say
We need to end our troubles
But assured her that he would find a way
Then one day he found a resolution
He just hoped that she
Would understand the solution
He tried to explain what was on his mind
But she said just do what you think is right
So we can end our suffering and leave our troubles behind
So he came home with a shiny new gun
And soon realized
That this would not be fun
But he had to do what he must
So he shot her
Before she could talk him out of it with her poise and her lust
Then he pulled the murder weapon back out
And just before he ended it for himself
He cried out so the world could hear him shout
I loved her god, just remember that
Then he aimed the gun at his heart
The next day his body was found on the welcome mat
People thought they were a happy pair
They never knew about all of their trouble
And all of their despair

[Edward_Elric_1308]

[quote="Lionhearts"]It was a very tragic night
When him and her
Both saw the light
You see,
He was getting very stressed
It was both causing them
To get clinically depressed
Everyday he would come home and say
We need to end our troubles
But assured her that he would find a way
Then one day he found a resolution
He just hoped that she
Would understand the solution
He tried to explain what was on his mind
But she said just do what you think is right
So we can end our suffering and leave our troubles behind
So he came home with a shiny new gun
And soon realized
That this would not be fun
But he had to do what he must
So he shot her
Before she could talk him out of it with her poise and her lust
Then he pulled the murder weapon back out
And just before he ended it for himself
He cried out so the world could hear him shout
I loved her god, just remember that
Then he aimed the gun at his heart
The next day his body was found on the welcome mat
People thought they were a happy pair
They never knew about all of their trouble
And all of their despair[/quote]

It's a great poem, but it's very sad, though. Keep up the good work!

[sirpeanut]

That's desturbing... and I loved every word of it! Great job!