What Do You Think of My Poem?

Edward_Elric_1308 · Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2007 12:23 pm Post subject: What Do You Think of My Poem?

I have a poem, but I want to know what you guys think. It's about this guy I have a crush on. Here it is:

“Just Want to Be With You”

I saw you looking at me that day.
Your eyes meeting mine in that questionable way.
That day, I remember everything you said.
With you around, I had nothing to dread.

Do you really love me?
Is there another girl you want to see?
Tell me how you feel about me, please.
Or the loneliness in my heart will never cease.

Cupid, why must you torment me with your bow?
I just want him to tell me he loves me so.
I knew you were the one from the start.
I want to love you with all my heart.

FFCKirara · Newb Joined: 18 Jul 2005 Posts: 3 Location: FL

I think it is really good, great job on the poem ^-^

CrimsinD · Newb Joined: 10 Sep 2007 Posts: 21

(posting this reply so late)

But here goes sweet poem! You know if you give it to him good chances are if he likes you he'll probably fall in love with ya. Or at least be well on the way of getting there.