invisigirl591 Newb
Joined: 15 Apr 2007 Posts: 5
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Posted: Sun Apr 15, 2007 12:28 pm Post subject: Swiftly Moving On... please tell me what you think! |
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Swiftly Moving on
Swiftly, Swiftly,
moving in the breeze,
Swiftly, Swiftly,
going past the trees,
Swiftly, Swiftly,
running in the land,
Swiftly, Swiftly,
going across the sea,
I ran through life,
not worrying one bit,
now it’s almost gone,
almost over,
I didn’t care,
I didn’t help,
I didn’t teach,
I wish I did,
because my death awaits,
I should have slowed,
not wish away,
It’s all my fault,
and now here I lay,
dead in the grass,
dead in the breeze,
dead in the sand,
dead in the seas,
No one cares,
for I was no one,
Swiftly, Swiftly,
moving on.
This is a poem I wrote. Please tell me what you think or any advice you may have. |
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