Round Two, Ding Ding Ding Ding Ding!

[luckycloverluck]

XDD I could not resist with the title.

But now, onto business.


[img]http://img174.imageshack.us/img174/8162/redonelineartwmvk3.png[/img]


This is a redo of a piece already in my gallery. I took one look at that quickie, and immediately thought, "Okay, this is [i]waaaaayyy[/i] too crappy for my current kick."

I've taken what I've learned from my other project and applied here as best I could, but I have some real concerns with the pic. Namely, the face and clothing. Yes, the lineart is unattractive, but once I get the anatomy right, THEN I'll work on making the lines interesting.

I don't want to waste time on a bad picture, that's all.

Soooooooo...any advice?
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It is the artist, not the fandom, that makes the picture worth it.

If you feel that the fandom is worthless, then fighting the urge to pass judgement on a picture based on that fandom is a rather good idea.

That is, of course, unless you want the fangirls/fanboys coming after you with foaming mouths.
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"Thy pen is mightier then thy sword."
"But Miss Lefae!"
"THOU SHALT NOT FORGETETH THAT, PUNKETH!!"

[London]

[img]http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y242/ayokaeu/Edits/luckyedit.png[/img]
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[i][size=9]Go Yankees![/size][/i]

[luckycloverluck]

Thanks!
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It is the artist, not the fandom, that makes the picture worth it.

If you feel that the fandom is worthless, then fighting the urge to pass judgement on a picture based on that fandom is a rather good idea.

That is, of course, unless you want the fangirls/fanboys coming after you with foaming mouths.
+++++++++++++++++++
"Thy pen is mightier then thy sword."
"But Miss Lefae!"
"THOU SHALT NOT FORGETETH THAT, PUNKETH!!"

[luckycloverluck]

Second try. Better?

And yes, I am going to clean up the lineart, I will, I will...

[img]http://img412.imageshack.us/img412/3441/lineartredo2wmdb8.png[/img]
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It is the artist, not the fandom, that makes the picture worth it.

If you feel that the fandom is worthless, then fighting the urge to pass judgement on a picture based on that fandom is a rather good idea.

That is, of course, unless you want the fangirls/fanboys coming after you with foaming mouths.
+++++++++++++++++++
"Thy pen is mightier then thy sword."
"But Miss Lefae!"
"THOU SHALT NOT FORGETETH THAT, PUNKETH!!"

[Trinity_Fire]

The face is much better. However, remove the line for her neck; the line London placed showed it pretty much hidden by the hair, which is where it should be. Yours is way too narrow.
The hair you draw is really... clumpy. Try to learn to draw finer strands, as that would be more realistic. Hair doesn't naturally form triangles.
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[luckycloverluck]

Will do.
_________________
It is the artist, not the fandom, that makes the picture worth it.

If you feel that the fandom is worthless, then fighting the urge to pass judgement on a picture based on that fandom is a rather good idea.

That is, of course, unless you want the fangirls/fanboys coming after you with foaming mouths.
+++++++++++++++++++
"Thy pen is mightier then thy sword."
"But Miss Lefae!"
"THOU SHALT NOT FORGETETH THAT, PUNKETH!!"