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PostPosted: Sat May 24, 2008 9:36 pm    Post subject: Nude Pencil Drawing (NSFW) Reply with quote

Pencil drawing.

Not the gratest drawing in the world, I suffer from massive contrast failures as always, I'll prolly never shake it either I just don't do pencil work like this often enough to work out the bugs.


[img]http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v371/battousaiofnphiles/artwork/scan0001_3_4.jpg[/img]
[u][url=http://www.fanart-central.net/pic-687275.html]See it bigger Here[/url][/u]

Next time remind me, Start with the problem arias and do them first....that way when I break the surface of the paper I am not loosing seven hours to start over.....Sad

I know her face is an issue but....Advice, Problems ?
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PostPosted: Sat May 24, 2008 10:11 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

[quote]Next time remind me, Start with the problem [url=http://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/aria#Noun][u]arias[/u][/url] and do them first....[/quote]
Ooh, musical critiques... that's gotta be a first Wink
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PostPosted: Sat May 24, 2008 10:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

[quote="Stratadrake"][quote]Next time remind me, Start with the problem [url=http://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/aria#Noun][u]arias[/u][/url] and do them first....[/quote]
Ooh, musical critiques... that's gotta be a first Wink[/quote]

lol wow, I know my spelling is bad and all but..... Sigh
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PostPosted: Thu Jul 03, 2008 11:04 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I know I'm super-late with this, but it caught my eye.

Good things first: I love the form, the pose, the composition... and the hair looks fantastic. =3 The shading all-in-all is passable, and I dig the strong highlights although I feel like there should have been stronger shadows to complement 'em.

Some things could use some work, though. I love that you're tackling realism, as it seems to be a dying art in an anime-ruled world, and I implore you to keep practicing! It looks great for a practice piece. The eyes are perhaps a little big, although the placing and the eyebrows look very nice. The nose could be a bit more detailed, although I know it's the MOST annoying part of the human face to draw, and it looks fine as it is. The teeth and lips could use a bit more shading... pay attention to how the lower lip curves out and how the upper lip casts a shadow over the teeth. The lines from the corner of the lip to the mouth are a bit stark; it may be better to shade them in more. They're light shadows on a girl as young as the one you drew. ^^ The jawline really throws me off, and I'm having a hard time putting this bit of advice into words. Her cheeks are too round, in my opinion, and her chin sticks out a little much.... Usually the jaw line is smoother.

The body looks good, although a good attempt at drawing the hands would have been nice. As they are, they don't detract too much from the piece. ^^() The boobs clearly had fine linework; the shape is right but they look a little flat. With a bit more of a darker tone around the underside they should maybe look a little rounder. They should probably also cast a shadow on the rest of the body. I adore the way you hinted at her collarbone; it looks almost impressionistic, and as weird as it is to fixate on a little detail like that I like it. x3 There isn't much I can say about the rest of the body, except to advise you to use more tones- there should be stronger dark bits where her arm casts a shadow on her body and where her body curves away from the viewer along her back, shoulder and butt.

All in all, it looks very good! Thanks for sharing.
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PostPosted: Thu Jul 03, 2008 11:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

[quote="EmberGryphon"]I know I'm super-late with this, but it caught my eye.

Good things first: I love the form, the pose, the composition... and the hair looks fantastic. =3 The shading all-in-all is passable, and I dig the strong highlights although I feel like there should have been stronger shadows to complement 'em.

Some things could use some work, though. I love that you're tackling realism, as it seems to be a dying art in an anime-ruled world, and I implore you to keep practicing! It looks great for a practice piece. The eyes are perhaps a little big, although the placing and the eyebrows look very nice. The nose could be a bit more detailed, although I know it's the MOST annoying part of the human face to draw, and it looks fine as it is. The teeth and lips could use a bit more shading... pay attention to how the lower lip curves out and how the upper lip casts a shadow over the teeth. The lines from the corner of the lip to the mouth are a bit stark; it may be better to shade them in more. They're light shadows on a girl as young as the one you drew. ^^ The jawline really throws me off, and I'm having a hard time putting this bit of advice into words. Her cheeks are too round, in my opinion, and her chin sticks out a little much.... Usually the jaw line is smoother.

The body looks good, although a good attempt at drawing the hands would have been nice. As they are, they don't detract too much from the piece. ^^() The boobs clearly had fine linework; the shape is right but they look a little flat. With a bit more of a darker tone around the underside they should maybe look a little rounder. They should probably also cast a shadow on the rest of the body. I adore the way you hinted at her collarbone; it looks almost impressionistic, and as weird as it is to fixate on a little detail like that I like it. x3 There isn't much I can say about the rest of the body, except to advise you to use more tones- there should be stronger dark bits where her arm casts a shadow on her body and where her body curves away from the viewer along her back, shoulder and butt.

All in all, it looks very good! Thanks for sharing.[/quote]

...I kinda forgot all about this thread.....

The pose and composition I can't really take credit for as this was a directly referenced picture, I was planning to include reference image but forgot to bring a copy in with me and did not get to it untill a few days later. It's actually a very poor picture to be using for reference but I have always liked it but could never turn up a full sized copy. I had this image on my computer for ages but it's friggin tiny, so I figured I would use my pencil to enlarge it and get some practice. [u][url=http://www.picaroni.com/original_1.jpg]Here it is[/url][/u] for what it's worth.

My primary focus in this one was lines. Drawing cartoons I have developed a serious issue with lines, so I wanted to try working them out. I broke the surface of the paper in both the nose and the mouth and that just burned me up as they where the last to be done. Her hair is one of my favorite parts of the picture so I payed special attention there, even then the 6B pencil I used was insufficient and the drawing needed a contrast boost after scanning (that is why the BG looks as shitty as it does). I think that contrast boost killed some of what little tonal range I had but it was not great to begin with so....

Hopfully I can work out those flaws in the anatomy to the point I can try this one again and actually fill in the missing details. Contrast and tonal range are something I really do need to work on. I'm going to have to do another realism pic at some point before long if I can find the time with better reference to work with, I have plenty loafin around the house so I am sure I can find somethingof interest. Sadly I do have to admit that more often than not, I start these and seldom finish them due to several contributing factors. A sixteen hour work day being the biggest one.
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 8:27 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

...Yeah, I kinda forgot about this whole forum. ^^() Sorry about the month-late reply, but I liked the image and wanted to have input!

I can see why that picture would be really hard to work from... Yeesh, there's no detail. And sorry if I was waspish or mean-sounding while giving crit, I didn't mean to but sometimes I don't read over everything I've typed and things kinda sound different when read than they did in my head. ^^() I kinda forgot about scanner death as a good reason for the lack of tones, but I can understand it. The unfortunate side-effect of traditional media.

But, yeah. Hooray for going back to the basics- practicing lines and form and strict realism is something I need to work on, too. I hope you find the time to experiment; your art really is lovely. =o
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