my two favorites (of the ones i wrote)

[BlackAngelicDevilFire]

Ten Ways of Looking at the Moon

A sphere of light
A sliver of silver
A splinter
in the glossy sky
I
Drop the work
Of the day
Death of sun
Moon come out
Night begins
II
Tides pour in
Tides wash out
The uncontrollable sea
Reigned in by
The moon's
Chariot
III
Great yellow crater
The moon is
A cat's eye
Peering out of
The darkness
IV
Fair Luna's stare
Her watchful gaze
Keeping order
in the stars
On her throne
The Guardian of Night
V
A rose may blossom
So does the moon
Equal in beauty
Crescent, full, new
Seed, bud, flower
VI
The moon's
Punctured holes
Form the notes
Of the chorus
From the nightingale's
Song
VII
Moonlight
Contained in a lantern
On a platform of darkness
Shines sorrow
VIII
The child moon
Holds the stars
Like marbles
Thumb ready
Shooting star
Make a wish
IX
Radiant Lilith
Ebony Hair
Pale face
Sparkling eyes
Dark moon
X

&

Wings

I never flew
So I could not fall
My fear of height
Would doom us all
I fled from light
And into shadow
You changed my sight
Shined my soul
Life shone bright
Thought I never could
Ignore you call
Was by evil deceived
Tricked from my freedom
And decided to leave
I glanced 'round this kingdom
And stopped to breathe
One life changing moment
A decision to make
Then the worst one I take
From where you lifted me
I began to fall
And in the wind I began to see
All great things bestowed to me
You saw me drop
And fell as well
The good wind stopped
I searched in haze
To your arm that mine had found
I touched my back
And felt a wing
I was so alive
I began to sing
Then from my wing to yours I look
Then rest my eyes on the wing I took
You smiled at me
Love, never stolen, but given
Was the melody
The happy course driven
And so was I saved
By love's given wing
And again with love
We fly and sing




What do you think?

[TheWolfsFang]

*Applause* 'Tis very good, I like them both
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When all things end darkly,
That is when my bright work begins.
Death is all I know.

[BlackAngelicDevilFire]

thanks a lot! i really appreciate responses to what i post. Thanks!