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ConkerTSquirrel
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PostPosted: Thu Mar 08, 2012 1:57 pm    Post subject: Please tell me what you think. Reply with quote
I noticed the error with 'though' in the text, sorry :')
http://conkertsquirrel.deviantart.com/#/d4s1gx1
pls comment i would really like some feedback on this, positive or otherwise
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Firiel
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PostPosted: Thu Jun 28, 2012 8:57 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Mm. Nice clean rhymes. A little bit singsong, maybe, which isn't my favorite mode of poetry, but it works with a peaceful, playful subject like this.

Is the poem intended to loop?
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