I wouldn't mind some brutally honest critique

Rakshiv

I'd like it if someone could give me their two cents about these pieces.

http://www.fanart-central.net/pic-709113.html This is a picture of one of my characters, Alphonse LeClaire. I'd like some pointers on colouring both clothes and faces. Any other critique would be greatly appreciated.

http://www.fanart-central.net/story-53920.html This is the science fiction story I'm working on featuring none other than Alphonse himself. If anyone's actually up to reading and giving their advise as to how to improve, once again I would appreciate it to no end.

Thanks in advance to anyone who actually takes the time to look. Peace! Smile

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Jedi · Posted: Mon Aug 25, 2008 9:55 am Post subject:

Alphonse LeClaire: Hmm... looks all right, except: the body should be turned left (to his left) a little more, so that the gun arm's elbow is resting on his upper right leg. The left foot should also be turned in a little more, otherwise, the angle looks funny. The left arm should be out straight, if the body's turned to his left a little more. There should be shadowing under the feet, too, to give it a little more depth. All in all, a valiant attempt, indeed.
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Rakshiv · Posted: Mon Aug 25, 2008 4:57 pm Post subject:

Jedi, thank you for your insight. I had nothing but trouble with his gun arm, and now that you mention it the angling of the feet[i] is[/i] off. I'll take your considerations into thought next time I attempt a picture of him. Thanks!
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Jedi · Posted: Tue Aug 26, 2008 9:17 am Post subject:

You're most welcome. Glad I was of some help.
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Rakshiv · Posted: Tue Aug 26, 2008 12:43 pm Post subject:

Damnit, that link to my story isn;t working. Ah, well. For people who care, here's the correct one. http://www.fanart-central.net/story-54001.html
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TyrannicalTilly · Newb Joined: 27 Sep 2008 Posts: 6 Location: New Zealand

Oh hi!
I would suggest shading. Shade, and then shade some more. And not just by putting black everywhere, but use a tonne more colours.
Green, dark green, darker green, slightly greyer green, lighter green.

Uhm, try to stop thinking of it as a drawing and try 'painting' it more?

Rakshiv · Posted: Mon Sep 29, 2008 7:58 am Post subject:

TyrannicalTilly: That's some good advice, I'll take it into heart next time I attempt a digital picture. Smile

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