Prologue Of Galxia

[Enjeru]

Here is the Prologue to my book Galxia.

Aura ran though the City of Ayer; main City of Ayerno. Kain had attacked. By the time Kain had been spotted, it was to late. Aura began runnin to Ayerno Tower. She knew that was where Kain stood, slowly destroying Ayerno. Slowly causing his destuction. Aura ran & ran for what seemd like an Eternity to her. Already, Kain had sent Metors to wipe out half the Planet. Still, Aura didn't give in. She continued to run, hoping she wasn't to late.By the time Aura did reach Ayerno Tower, she was tired & out-of-breath.

"Xylo." she said, breathing heavily. "Xylo. I'm begging you. Stop this Insanity. Please!" Kain said nothing to her. He only ackowledged her, then turned around to continue his work. Aura became upset at this. She walked over to Kain & placed her hand on his shoulder. Immediatyly, she was overpowered by a cooling snesation. Kain's skin was as cold as ice. Still, she didn't care. She had to get though to him. Somehow. "Xylo! Listen to me! Stop this now!" Kain still refused to say anything to her. This time, he didn't even look at her. Aura was furious. She had constently told Kain these things, and every time he refused to listen to her. Aura became furious. But, she also became worried. Aura finally gathered her last bit of strength & forced Kain to face her. Kain's Moonlight eyes faced her Ocean Studded ones. She begged in one final attempt to speak to him. "Xylo, please. I---" Before she could finish her sentance, Kain pushed her off with ease. She was so weak, it wasn't that difficult. He backed her up so far, that her foot caught the edge of the Tower.

"One... more... move." Kain said to her. Aura gasped as he did. She dropped her head in dis-may and was shocked to here him say this.

"You don't even sound like Xylo anymore. You truly have become Kain. That means I have failed you Xylo." She spred her arms slowly. "You want to kill me?" she asked. "Go ahead. It will only ease my pain." Kain walked toward Aura, and hit her in her stomach, knocking her out. She fell. Fell of Ayerno Tower. Kain only watched as her body fall helplessly to the solid ground below. Then, something happened. Kain's Yellow eyes become White. Just for a second. Seconds later, Kain jumped after Aura. She had just about hit the ground, until Kain caught her & carried her back up to the Tower. Kain gently set her down. He stared at her for a little while, Then gently kissed her lips. After that, he disappeared. Moments later, Aura awoke. Her eyes had become yellow.

I know it's a little strange, but It will all make sense in the End. I Promise.

[SilentSoul92]

Why don't you just post a link? It's much easier and takes up less room. and confusing yes, too many short sentences that can be combined, yes, good detail, yes, cliffhanger, yes, a 10, no. sorry. oh yeah and, this belongs in the Fanfic Critiques Section. You should move it before a mod gets on you case.