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PhunkYMunkY · Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 7:00 am Post subject:

[quote="anime_chick (Amy)"] I'm finishing up a Poem right now on Micosoft word.

But for some reason I forgot if a poem always has to rythem or not. :wacko: [/quote]
Noooo of course not..

A rhymed poem sounds aesthetically pleasing on the ears but it does not nessacarily (sp?) have to rhyme...

I have always thought a poem is meant to be lyrics of emotion. As if your feelings have a tune and your words play above that tune to express the music to form a song.
I believe you cannot write effectively if you have no emotion to draw words from. The words/lyrics of a poem/song are supposed to be raw emotion...

dunno where am going with this but that's pretty much the jist of it ^^;;

(tEdi: check this for Haiku's.. Haikus are like.. sort of.. cryptic short poems. Usually like 3 or 4 lines long. Very simple but tell alot about the subject. Quite powerful in itself.

jhonenfreak · Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 7:03 am Post subject:

It's 3 lines about one subject.

5 syllables
7 syllables
5 syllables

That's basically it.
...

Anyone know any good limericks? I heard one once that was kind of funny. It went:

Once there was a man from Calcutta,
Who had the most terrible stutta.
He said, "Pass the h-ham,
"And the j-j-j-jam,
"And the b-b-b-b-b-b-butta."

That's the only one I can really remember, and I could never really write a funny limerick on my own.
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jhonenfreak · Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 7:06 am Post subject:

[quote="PhunkYMunkY (Gray Roberts)"] [quote="anime_chick (Amy)"] I'm finishing up a Poem right now on Micosoft word.

But for some reason I forgot if a poem always has to rythem or not. :wacko: [/quote]
Noooo of course not..

A rhymed poem sounds aesthetically pleasing... [/quote]
I'm confused. Were you asking about rhyme or rhythm?
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anime_chick · Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 7:07 am Post subject:

LOL! That's funny! My poem is waaaayyyy llllooonnnggg and doesn't even rhyme.

I don't even know if it has a meaning.....
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PhunkYMunkY · Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 7:08 am Post subject:

[quote="jhonenfreak (Amy H)"] [quote="PhunkYMunkY (Gray Roberts)"] [quote="anime_chick (Amy)"] I'm finishing up a Poem right now on Micosoft word.

But for some reason I forgot if a poem always has to rythem or not. :wacko: [/quote]
Noooo of course not..

A rhymed poem sounds aesthetically pleasing... [/quote]
I'm confused. Were you asking about rhyme or rhythm? [/quote]
I'm pretty sure rhyme. Alot of people don't know whether or not a poem 'must' rhyme...

I think everything needs rhythem. Including stories in books n s**t lol

jhonenfreak · Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 7:10 am Post subject:

It could always be prose.

I didn't realize you were taking about rhyming earlier. I thought you asked about rhythm. Ah well. Let's see your writing, Amy!
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anime_chick · Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 7:13 am Post subject:

LOL! I think it sucks...

~The Fight..~

The Old Stragest Watched as the Young Samurai Fought.
The Young Samurai fought with Full Heart just wanting this to end.
But as more men came, The Samurai fought more.
But no longer could his body take it.

He was just a Puppet being controlled by an Undying Soul.
A Soul of which wishes to keep fighting for Honor and Hope.
But the young body did not want to live anymore.
But the Soul kept on winning the Battle inside.

As The Stragest got up, he commanded more men to attack at once.
He thought that battle was just noting more as Bloodshed as did the
Young Samurai.

But none the less the fight kept going.
After the Samurai slayed most of the Enemies, the
Stragest was Flabbergast.
He could not believe that a man as Young as the Samurai
Could endure so much.

He did not think that the Young Samurai was Human at all.
But a Demon posing as a Human.
But something inside him told him Let him winThis War is about nothing

He watch as one of his Officers was about to attack the Samurai.
He stopped him and said Sandana you are Japans greatest Samurai...
Then called Sandana smiled one last time before he fell.

Fell into the depths of Darkness forever..
His Young body just fell..
With the last smile he ever did.

Both fights were over.
Physically and Mentally
The Stragest watch..
The Fight is over..
But Yukimaru SandanaYou are still Japans greatest Samurai.In the Hearts of many...Dead...or Alive

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jhonenfreak · Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 7:16 am Post subject:

Love the theme of perservearance. Very inspiring!

What's both of your favorite subjects to write about?
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anime_chick · Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 7:20 am Post subject:

*Shruggs* Dunno...

I only write what I feel or whatever pops into my head, as did this one.

And thank you!
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PhunkYMunkY · Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 7:22 am Post subject:

Yeah, Amy, that really ain't half bad. Infact it's pretty cool to re-read..

Hmm.. Favorite subject ehhh.... hmm..

Probably anger and stuff like that though I don't act that way.. it kinda comes from within.. You know.. the usual clich s**t lol..

I have a poem here that I read a looong time ago on the net somewhere and it is just sooooo sad lol.. Take a gander.. get the tissues out Sad

lol...

Read on;

"How Could You?"
Copyright Jim Willis 2001

When I was a puppy, I entertained you with my antics and made you laugh.

You called me your child, and despite a number of chewed shoes and a couple of murdered throw pillows, I became your best friend. Whenever I was "bad," you'd shake your finger at me and ask "How could you?" - but then you'd relent, and roll me over for a bellyrub.

My housebreaking took a little longer than expected, because you were terribly busy, but we worked on that together. I remember those nights of nuzzling you in bed and listening to your confidences and secret dreams, and I believed that life could not be any more perfect. We went for long walks and runs in the park, car rides, stops for ice cream (I only got the cone because "ice cream is bad for dogs," you said), and I took long naps in the sun waiting for you to come home at the end of the day.

Gradually, you began spending more time at work and on your career, and more time searching for a human mate. I waited for you patiently, comforted you through heartbreaks and disappointments, never chided you about bad decisions, and romped with glee at your homecomings, and when you fell in love.

She, now your wife, is not a "dog person" - still I welcomed her into our home, tried to show her affection, and obeyed her. I was happy because you were happy. Then the human babies came along and I shared your excitement. I was fascinated by their pinkness, how they smelled, and I wanted to mother them, too. Only she and you worried that I might hurt them, and I spent most of my time banished to another room, or to a dog crate. Oh, how I wanted to love them, but I became a "prisoner of love."

As they began to grow, I became their friend. They clung to my fur and pulled themselves up on wobbly legs, poked fingers in my eyes, investigated my ears, and gave me kisses on my nose. I loved everything about them and their touch - because your touch was now so infrequent - and I would have defended them with my life if need be.

I would sneak into their beds and listen to their worries and secret dreams, and together we waited for the sound of your car in the driveway. There had been a time, when others asked you if you had a dog, that you produced a photo of me from your wallet and told them stories about me. These past few years, you just answered "yes" and changed the subject. I had gone from being "your dog" to "just a dog," and you resented every expenditure on my behalf.

Now, you have a new career opportunity in another city, and you and they will be moving to an apartment that does not allow pets. You've made the right decision for your "family," but there was a time when I was your only family.

I was excited about the car ride until we arrived at the animal shelter.

It smelled of dogs and cats, of fear, of hopelessness. You filled out the paperwork and said "I know you will find a good home for her." They shrugged and gave you a pained look. They understand the realities facing a middle-aged dog, even one with "papers." You had to pry your son's fingers loose from my collar as he screamed "No, Daddy! Please don't let them take my dog!" And I worried for him, and what lessons you had just taught him about friendship and loyalty, about love and responsibility, and about respect for all life. You gave me a goodbye pat on the head, avoided my eyes, and politely refused to take my collar and leash with you. You had a deadline to meet and now I have one, too.

After you left, the two nice ladies said you probably knew about your upcoming move months ago and made no attempt to find me another good home. They shook their heads and asked "How could you?"

They are as attentive to us here in the shelter as their busy schedules allow. They feed us, of course, but I lost my appetite days ago. At first, whenever anyone passed my pen, I rushed to the front, hoping it was you - that you had changed your mind - that this was all a bad dream...or I hoped it would at least be someone who cared, anyone who might save me. When I realized I could not compete with the frolicking for attention of happy puppies, oblivious to their own fate, I retreated to a far corner and waited.

I heard her footsteps as she came for me at the end of the day, and I padded along the aisle after her to a separate room. A blissfully quiet room. She placed me on the table and rubbed my ears, and told me not to worry. My heart pounded in anticipation of what was to come, but there was also a sense of relief. The prisoner of love had run out of days. As is my nature, I was more concerned about her. The burden which she bears weighs heavily on her, and I know that, the same way I knew your every mood.

She gently placed a tourniquet around my foreleg as a tear ran down her cheek. I licked her hand in the same way I used to comfort you so many years ago. She expertly slid the hypodermic needle into my vein. As I felt the sting and the cool liquid coursing through my body, I lay down sleepily, looked into her kind eyes and murmured "How could you?"

Perhaps because she understood my dogspeak, she said "I'm so sorry." She hugged me, and hurriedly explained it was her job to make sure I went to a better place, where I wouldn't be ignored or abused or abandoned, or have to fend for myself - a place of love and light so very different from this earthly place. And with my last bit of energy, I tried to convey to her with a thump of my tail that my "How could you?" was not directed at her. It was you, My Beloved Master, I was thinking of. I will think of you and wait for you forever.

May everyone in your life continue to show you so much loyalty.

The End

Awwww Sad

anime_chick · Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 7:31 am Post subject:

That was so Deep and had so much Sadness in it...
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jhonenfreak · Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 7:32 am Post subject:

I loved that. I don't really know what to say, but "awwww" pretty much does sum it up in one word.

My favorite subects to write about are usually whatever I find interesting or thought-provoking at the moment. And of course, I love to fit irony into many of my poems. Irony rocks.
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anime_chick · Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 7:34 am Post subject:

You said it!

But the one I did before had insperashin....

And Hope....

Here's my Full version with the people who inspired me to write it!

~The Fight..~

The Old Stragest Watched as the Young Samurai Fought.
The Young Samurai fought with Full Heart just wanting this to end.
But as more men came, The Samurai fought more.
But no longer could his body take it.

He was just a Puppet being controlled by an Undying Soul.
A Soul of which wishes to keep fighting for Honor and Hope.
But the young body did not want to live anymore.
But the Soul kept on winning the Battle inside.

As The Stragest got up, he commanded more men to attack at once.
He thought that battle was just noting more as Bloodshed as did the
Young Samurai.

But none the less the fight kept going.
After the Samurai slayed most of the Enemies, the
Stragest was Flabbergast.
He could not believe that a man as Young as the Samurai
Could endure so much.

He did not think that the Young Samurai was Human at all.
But a Demon posing as a Human.
But something inside him told him Let him winThis War is about nothing

He watched as one of his Officers was about to attack the Samurai.
He stopped him and said Sandana you are Japans greatest Samurai...
Then the one called Sandana smiled one last time before he fell.

Fell into the depths of Darkness forever..
His Young body just fell..
With the last smile he ever did.

Both fights were over.
Physically and Mentally
The Stragest watch..
The Fight is over..
But Yukimaru SandanaYou are still Japans greatest Samurai.In the Hearts of many...Dead...or Alive

-By
Amy Trejo

Inspired By Samurai Warriors

((Heres a pic of Yukimaru!))
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LadyoftheDeadlyDance · Forum Stalker Joined: 13 May 2004 Posts: 1144

That was good ^^ I liked it.

Ya think I should post up Incubus? Mwhahah...>) It's kinda, um, racy. ^^;

anime_chick · Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 8:31 am Post subject:

Thank you LDD!

And if you feel you should, Go for it!

I thought this poem was weild but you guys liked it, so go for it!
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LadyoftheDeadlyDance · Forum Stalker Joined: 13 May 2004 Posts: 1144

Meh, I'll do a link. Incubus

Because I know if I post it, I'll piss the youngin's parent's off. It's not THAT bad though... ^^;

anime_chick · Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 8:40 am Post subject:

Oh yeah!

I reamember reading this from you!

It's good!

Oh Crap!

I g2g! I have to sing in the choir for Church....

Oh Joy...
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kenshinswife · Very bored Joined: 04 Aug 2004 Posts: 144

ok...I have a poem...its in shakespere format...like...line a +c ryme and then lines b + d ryhme...and then lines...well ya you get the picture...its not that good tho....."Blind"

I see no stars at night
I see no light in day
I wish to hold you tight
Because youre always in my way
It just keeps on raining in my hell
It seemed like you loved me
But you didnt catch me as I fell
Now you just wont let me be
I can hear your thoughts
I can feel your pain
I can see the dark you brought
But can you see me go insane?
Did you see my eyes as I cried?
Because I looked at you when I died

LOL...I was very sad when I wrote this so I was wondering what it would be like if the one you loved made you blind....bla..its bad

kenshinswife · Very bored Joined: 04 Aug 2004 Posts: 144

o and LDD that poem was great! kinda disturbing but I loved it!
Cool

anime_chick · Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 11:33 am Post subject:

NO!!

That was very good!

Mine is bad!

But Oddly enough my Mother said it was a High School level poem...
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