Gundam Wing: The New Treat

LuverOfQuatre45 · Rookie Joined: 13 Aug 2005 Posts: 26

http://www.fanart-central.net/stories.php?sid=19401

Can people please read and give me comments, reviews, and such?

Son_of_God · Still very bored Joined: 01 Aug 2005 Posts: 350

[i][b]Please pardon my candor, but I feel it prudent so that you understand my point of view...thank you ^^

Now i must say, i didn't too much 'buy' this as a Gundam Wing fanfic; I found the characters much too put on, as if they had something to prove....and as if you had something to prove to the readers. Gundam Wing is a subtle yet thrilling take on the gundam franchise, and i just feel as though you didnt do it justice.

Don't get me wrong, I loved it either way...but you can stand for sum improvin', bra.

mmmmmmmm, fanfiction.....WHOSE NEXT?![/b][/i]
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LuverOfQuatre45 · Rookie Joined: 13 Aug 2005 Posts: 26

Well, also consider the fact that I've yet to introduce any of the important charecters. I was pissed to high hell when I wrote the Prolouge, the next chapter will be better.

And who knows, maybe Edwyn DOES have something to prove.

Son_of_God · Still very bored Joined: 01 Aug 2005 Posts: 350

[i]well you better make it a gooden', cause you got yourself a fan in me, bra.[/i]
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LuverOfQuatre45 · Rookie Joined: 13 Aug 2005 Posts: 26

I will.

Query, why is it at the end of each of your posts say, "Bra"? LOL!

Sephir0th666777 · Posted: Thu Aug 25, 2005 8:49 am Post subject:

Does it involve some droping a colony on someone else?

If not, then I reccomend implementing this overused plot deviece Very Happy

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LuverOfQuatre45 · Rookie Joined: 13 Aug 2005 Posts: 26

Do not worry, it may seem like this for now, but it's going to take a VERY great twist...

Sephir0th666777 · Posted: Thu Aug 25, 2005 7:14 pm Post subject:

Drop a Colony :angry:

Or have Kamille and Quatro/Char come

So it's a Gundam Wing Zeta Gundam crossover

Do it! do it!
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LuverOfQuatre45 · Rookie Joined: 13 Aug 2005 Posts: 26

It won't exactly be a colony....ah I'm saying to much!

And no one from Zeta!

Sephir0th666777 · Posted: Fri Aug 26, 2005 8:16 am Post subject:

[quote="LuverOfQuatre45 (Edwyn Arednale)"] It won't exactly be a colony....ah I'm saying to much!

And no one from Zeta! [/quote]
What about SeeD?

SeeD Destiny?

Turn-A?

08th MS Team?

Stardust Memory?

War in th pocket?

G?

Victory?

F91?

Char's Counter Attack?

ZZ?

It best have some Epyon action :angry:

Epyon :wub:
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LuverOfQuatre45 · Rookie Joined: 13 Aug 2005 Posts: 26

NO! No one from any other series! And no Epyon!

Sephir0th666777 · Posted: Fri Aug 26, 2005 8:49 am Post subject:

No Epyon :(

Howsabout Tallgeese?
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LuverOfQuatre45 · Rookie Joined: 13 Aug 2005 Posts: 26

Yes, Milliardo and Tallgessee III will be in it..

Sephir0th666777 · Posted: Fri Aug 26, 2005 2:12 pm Post subject:

:wub: heat rod :wub:
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LuverOfQuatre45 · Rookie Joined: 13 Aug 2005 Posts: 26

ok, for all (3 people) fans of this story, we've got a problem.

I'm in a MAJOR Writer's Block!

I need help! PWEASE! I'M DESPERATE!!!

Sephir0th666777 · Posted: Fri Aug 26, 2005 8:08 pm Post subject:

ZeTa GuNdAm.....

lolz

Put some newtypes in there, reuse some animation, and and rip off zeta at every turn. Oh wait.

that would make it a Gundam SeeD Destiny fanfic
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LuverOfQuatre45 · Rookie Joined: 13 Aug 2005 Posts: 26

Alright, If you say that I should make this a cross over one more time, I'm not een going to continue and then you'll have Kratosgirl to deal with.

Captain_Hook · Very bored Joined: 28 Jun 2005 Posts: 217

I'm sorry, but shouldn't this be in the fanfiction critiques section? It's so annoying how many people don't follow the rules <_<. Not to mention you're also spamming by going on about writers block. . . . .

LuverOfQuatre45 · Rookie Joined: 13 Aug 2005 Posts: 26

No need to be pissed. I had posted it here on accident. And the resason I said I had writers block is because that It might take a while for the next chapter to come out.

Son_of_God · Still very bored Joined: 01 Aug 2005 Posts: 350

[i]Dude, nevermind the prude there. You didn't do anything wrong; but I really wanna read the next pieces. I gotta find out how you manage to string this story together.....i dont think you can pull it off, but ill leave it to u to prove me wrong'age.[/i]
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