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OMNI-X Very bored
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Posted: Sun Aug 21, 2005 7:41 am Post subject: |
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[quote="Stratadrake (Strata)"] Weak Points:
- On closer inspection, it looks a little back-heavy (I blame the combination of digitigrade feet and 'backpack' placement of the rear spoiler and wheels)
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Sigh... unfortunately, the rules of the contest require a 'feasible' transformation with no 'animation magic' thrown in, and the robot must work within the confines of the official Matmobile Lineart we were presented with. <_<
Anywhoo, thanks for the nice comments, and score.
With regard to your blackwolf artwork, here's what I can say:
The Good:
- nice colored pencil work. wish I can do half as good
- the sunset effect (if that was what you were going for) looks nice
The Not-so-good:
- proportion. the head looks a tad too big
- still on proportion, the body is a little short. from my POV, the root of the wings should be a little behind the shoulder blades. this one looks like it's coming out of the neck.
Nicely colored work. Good background effects, porportions are off though.
3/5
Here's another contest entry of mine, although I never got this entered.
The theme of the contest was [i]'Favorite Super Robot Pilot Fanart'[/i]. This is my favorite pilot. Miria 639, from Macross: Ai, Oboeteimasuka? and that's her Queadluun Rau behind her.
Enjoy!
Miria 639 |
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Stratadrake Elder Than Dirt
Joined: 05 May 2004 Posts: 13710 Location: Moo
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Posted: Sun Aug 21, 2005 9:38 am Post subject: |
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[quote]Sigh... unfortunately, the rules of the contest require a 'feasible' transformation with no 'animation magic' thrown in, and the robot must work within the confines of the official Batmobile Lineart we were presented with.[/quote]
In other words, Alternators style... indeed, more difficult.
[quote]from my POV, the root of the wings should be a little behind the shoulder blades. this one looks like it's coming out of the neck.[/quote]
They were... but the way they have to blend in with her gray pelt, as well as the extra girth required to hold the wing muscles... (refer to quick attachment) I guess it just ... happens. *shrug* ^_^
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Stratadrake Elder Than Dirt
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Posted: Sun Aug 21, 2005 9:54 am Post subject: |
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Double-post for clarity (since attachmnts always appear at the bottom, and I'm not submitting that for a critique).
Okay, Miria... let's see, strong points:
- As always, a good grasp on physiology and linework
Weak points:
- None that I can point out....
Overall:
- Definitely in your element there. I'll give it a 4/5.
Next:
http://www.fanart-central.net/pic-218640.html
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Lady_E Newb
Joined: 19 Aug 2005 Posts: 12
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Posted: Tue Aug 23, 2005 2:12 pm Post subject: |
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It's very strange, but besides that it looks very beautiful and creative. 4.5/5
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/21856212/
(he doesn't have hands because that's my drawing style.) |
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element_bm13 Member
Joined: 02 Jul 2005 Posts: 48
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Posted: Tue Aug 23, 2005 5:57 pm Post subject: |
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Allright. The face was the strongest part about it so good job. The picture itself is a little dark which affects the coloring a little bit. the color would add a lot to the picture if it could be seen better. I'll give it...7/10. :D
Here's mine. |
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Stratadrake Elder Than Dirt
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Posted: Tue Aug 23, 2005 9:11 pm Post subject: |
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[quote]It's very strange, but besides that it looks very beautiful and creative. 4.5/5[/quote]
Meh, that's not a critique ... not enough of one, anyway. Try again please! (Try the "Strong Points / Weak Points / Overall" method, like OMNI and I did) _________________ Strata here: [url=http://www.nanowrimo.org/eng/user/242293]Nanowrimo[/url] - [url=www.fanart-central.net/user-Stratadrake.php]FAC[/url] - [url=http://stratadrake.deviantart.com]dA[/url] - [url=www.furaffinity.net/user/Stratadrake/]FA[/url]
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Kori_Tae Rookie
Joined: 27 Jun 2004 Posts: 40
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Posted: Fri Sep 02, 2005 1:04 pm Post subject: |
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I'm impatient... So I'll do it.
Strong points:
*Love the colouring.
*Very creative, and it looks (eerily) possible to exist...
Weak points:
* In the middle picture, the tail looks like it's connected from the front?
*Body shape's a little weird, but then they [i]are[/i] a new species, so that doesn't matter.
Overall:
4/5
This is just lineart cuz I haven't had time to colour it yet. And I dunno if I will, I don't like it anymore.
Critique this! |
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amanga Rookie
Joined: 26 Mar 2005 Posts: 32
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Posted: Sat Sep 03, 2005 11:03 pm Post subject: |
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oh~` i will.
the good- shes got really good porportions, nothings off body wise
i love her hair, its so cute
and the clothes are cool i like them.
the bad-the hands could use some work, the one griping the sowrd doesn't look like its gripping the sword.
and theres something about her eyes i just can't place what it is excatly.
but over all i really really like the pic, it seems so cute^^. i would give it a 8 and 1/2.
heres my pic. its a sketch i drew like at 12 in the moring, so its not my best but for some odd reason i still like it. |
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infurno How can I get a custom title thing?
Joined: 02 May 2005 Posts: 873 Location: 1 of the 10,000 lakes.
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Posted: Tue Sep 20, 2005 6:23 pm Post subject: |
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Not Bad A little Dark but A lot of detail
http://fanart-central.net/pic-278769.html _________________ [center][img]http://i21.photobucket.com/albums/b260/infurnoASH/TrailblazerChevy34.gif[/img][/center] |
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Ogrim_Doomhammer Oldbie
Joined: 06 Dec 2004 Posts: 2116
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Posted: Mon Oct 17, 2005 8:59 am Post subject: |
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Critique this one: http://fanart-central.net/pic-172317.html (if you like it please check the rest of the gallery)
I think that the legs are weird positioned and the waist a little narrow but the armor is really cool. I also think that the weapon in her right hand looks a little bit strange. You should put as much effort in the face and arms as you did on the face. Keep it up! _________________ [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/user-Ogrim_Doomhammer.php][img]http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b167/Ogrim_Doomhammer/lennonbannercopy.jpg[/img][/url]
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Touzoku-joou Oldbie
Joined: 30 Oct 2004 Posts: 2399 Location: interweb
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Posted: Wed Oct 19, 2005 6:36 pm Post subject: |
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Pretty nice. =) I think the shading around the nose area and the bottom eyelid should be more defined, though. It would make it look more 3-D. As of now, it doesn't look like it even has a bottom eyelid. :\ But it's still a nice picture. I like the coloring of the iris.
http://fanart-central.net/pic-303341.html
Painting I did on monday of a Snowy Plover. _________________ [url=http://www.fanart-central.net/user-Touzoku-Joou.php]FAC[/url] |
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Twinstar Has No Life
Joined: 07 Sep 2005 Posts: 649
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Posted: Sun Oct 23, 2005 11:44 am Post subject: |
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I left a comment on the pic. Good pic. I give a 4/5
This one needs a bit more opinions, please
My DBZ pic
Please leave the critque on the pic so I can refer back to it easier. Please! _________________ [img]http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b151/Twinstar1/HirokiNowakiBanner1v2.jpg[/img] |
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SoaringKitty Very bored
Joined: 29 May 2005 Posts: 157
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Posted: Wed Oct 26, 2005 5:12 pm Post subject: |
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I think that picture looks exactly like the show. The only fault I can find is the streaks in the upper-right hand corner. Um, 4 1/2 out of a 5.
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OMNI-X Very bored
Joined: 25 Sep 2004 Posts: 141
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Posted: Thu Oct 27, 2005 12:05 pm Post subject: |
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[quote="Twinstar (Dianne)"] I left a comment on the pic. Good pic. I give a 4/5
This one needs a bit more opinions, please
My DBZ pic
Please leave the critque on the pic so I can refer back to it easier. Please! [/quote]
Hi Twinstar!
Since [i]Soaring Kitty[/i] didn't leave a pic for me to critique, I'll be going over yours. I hope you don't mind. :D
The Good:
- the colors look very nice, and consistent
- it's distinguishable as DBZ fanart, but doesn't try too hard to be 'DBZ' (hope you got what I mean)
- the separation of each individual frame, isn't very hard on the eyes.
The Nitpicks:
- I only have one. The frame on the upper right (Goku, Gohan, Vegita), Goku's neck looks like it's broken. The line on the neck appears too 'bent' making the head look 'off.'
That's about it. ;)
Overall, the pic looks great! Being a former DBZ fan, I enjoyed looking at your pics as it reminds me of the older DBZ series. Not the latter abomination where Goku turns to SS99th level.
As for my work, it's an old school super robot, [b]Mazinger Z.[/b] This is an entry for our October Fun-Draw over at Robot-Japan.Com. The contest focuses on one or more of Mazinger's weapons in action. In this case, I chose the 'Hatchet Punch.'
Let me know what you guys think by critiquing it here, and posting your comments on the FAC Gallery.
Thanks, and enjoy!
Mazinger Z: OVA Version |
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Twinstar Has No Life
Joined: 07 Sep 2005 Posts: 649
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Posted: Sun Oct 30, 2005 10:46 am Post subject: |
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Thank you so much for your critique. All points will always help in the future. And don't worry, I got everything you said
My turn to critique yours.
Good Points
-Your pic is very creative and you've put a lot of detail into it.
-I really like the expression on the one robot's face (top right-hand corner)
-I like the little pieces flying around where the other robots got hit as well as the liquid coming out of the one. Some people just draw a slice in the metal, but not usually little pieces here and there. (I hope you understand what I meant)
-The shading was very well done.
-The poses are really well done too.
Bad points (but not really that bad)
-I think that if you were going to colour a part of it, you should have donw the whole pic. Although personally, I think it would have been fine with no colour. It seems though you were trying to emphasize the red in the picture.
All in all, it was well done. You are very good at drawing robots. Keep it up
Here's another one of mine but be warned, IT'S RATED NC-17. It contains sex so if you are offended by that stuff, please don't look at it. Thanks
Matt and Makita's Love _________________ [img]http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b151/Twinstar1/HirokiNowakiBanner1v2.jpg[/img] |
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OMNI-X Very bored
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Posted: Sun Oct 30, 2005 6:56 pm Post subject: |
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Thanks for the nice feedback TS! The red areas were indeed meant to highlight those speciifc parts on Mazinger Z. For the life of me I can't color anything half as decent as some of the folks here, but I am working on my PS skills. ;)
As for your piece, it's very nicely done.
Good Points:
- very nice line art. smooth countours of the body.
- excellent proportions on the body
- looks professional
Area For Improvement:
- a little shading or colour would have really perked the line art
Overall, you did a very good job. The line art is very simple, but looks like it was done by a pro. If you threw in some shading, or some color, the drawing would have really stood out.
Very nice work!
Here's another one of mine. Again, let me remind the person doing the critique that I [i]can't color even if my life depended on it[/i] so I opt for monochromatic artwork.
This piece is called [b]Machine Maiden Ver. 01[/b]. Much like my [i]Babes & Blades[/i] line of artwork, this will be concentrating on a specific theme with different female forms linked to Machines.
This is the first one. Enjoy!
Machine Maiden Ver. 01 |
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Stratadrake Elder Than Dirt
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Posted: Sun Oct 30, 2005 7:44 pm Post subject: |
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Another mech?
Strong Points:
- As always, your details and linework are first-class.
Weak Points:
- I'm no fan of tightly form-fitting bodysuits, either on males or females. But that's just me, and isn't going to change anytime soon.
- Like you already said, you don't color. The drawing is a huge sea of lines, and without much shading/contrast to help separate what's what, it's hard to read the "big picture" (no pun intended), particularly for the normal sized view.
(I'm not sure what trouble you have with coloring... if you just practice shading different areas with just single hues, no mixing, it's really not any harder than standard pencil shading)
Overall: Very strong 4/5.
As for me, I'm currently working on this one, attached. Don't bother trying to read the heiroglyphics, just let me know what you can point out about the character shown.
For starters, due to a time limit on my part the final version isn't going to change much from what you see here. But critique away anyway, it always helps to keep tips in mind for [i]future[/i] drawings. ^_^
PS: The length of his tail is not a flaw. It actually IS supposed to be that long. _________________ Strata here: [url=http://www.nanowrimo.org/eng/user/242293]Nanowrimo[/url] - [url=www.fanart-central.net/user-Stratadrake.php]FAC[/url] - [url=http://stratadrake.deviantart.com]dA[/url] - [url=www.furaffinity.net/user/Stratadrake/]FA[/url]
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OMNI-X Very bored
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Posted: Fri Nov 04, 2005 9:30 pm Post subject: |
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I see what you mean with the whole contrast bit. I should've pushed for a darker shade for the mech in the background.
Thanks for the tip.
With regard to your lizard-man, been here for a while but no one's posted a critique on it. I wonder why he he he he :lol:
I'll do it then, just to get this thread moving.
Since the artwork is basically line art, there's nothing much to say.
The Good:
- line work is good. smooth, clean
- you've got a good eye for reptile-human hybrid details
- very well done pose. catches the whole 'relax' bit.
Room For Improvement:
- lizard-man's left leg looks short (but me thinks it's the perpective )
- dunno if you did it on purpose, but the head looks like a size small for the neck, making the neck look too long.
- color
Over all, looks good compared to your other [colored] works.
As for mine, this was a commissioned artwork from one of my friends at another BBS, asking for a Halloween splash page for his website.
This is Samhain: The Spirit Of All Hallow's Eve. Didn't do much detailing since he said he'll be doing the rest, so that would explain the slightly dull background.
Tell me what you think.
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Stratadrake Elder Than Dirt
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Posted: Fri Nov 04, 2005 11:47 pm Post subject: |
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Actually, he's not a reptilian at all... just aquatic, hence the smooth skin. And you're right, his left leg is supposed to be angled towards the camera... I hate perspective.
Hmm, now for yours, let's see:
Strong Points:
- Um, the usual? Details are nice, good pose, and the shading, too.
Weak Points:
- Can't think of any. The fingers on her left hand look a little freaky though, I think it's the angle of the ring finger.
Other:
That hand rising from the ground is ghosty-transparent, right?
Overall: 4 out of 5 easily, maybe even a 5. Halloween's not my specialty though.
Okay, since you mentioned coloring, there's no way I'm NOT going to choose this:
http://www.fanart-central.net/pic-309860.html
The finished version. A few small tweaks, nothing major ... heck, unless you overlay it with the original sketch(es), you might not even spot the differences at all. _________________ Strata here: [url=http://www.nanowrimo.org/eng/user/242293]Nanowrimo[/url] - [url=www.fanart-central.net/user-Stratadrake.php]FAC[/url] - [url=http://stratadrake.deviantart.com]dA[/url] - [url=www.furaffinity.net/user/Stratadrake/]FA[/url]
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Brianhjh
Joined: 25 Sep 2004 Posts: 8014 Location: Queen's University
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Posted: Sat Nov 05, 2005 12:06 am Post subject: |
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Strong Points:
-The alphabet is aethetically (sp?) pleasing and intricate, you did a very good job in writing them in straight rows... something I probably can never do...
-The shading is delicate and even in all places, as always. ;)
-The couch looks believable and it adds a lot to the picture.
Improvements:
I would have guessed that you would use tinted papers since you always use colored pencils... but you don't. have you tried them? It always add a nice touch and a subtle theme to the drawing even if you color the entire paper in different color.
- The shioren is entirely in blue shade, and the couch is entirely in green-yellow ochre shade... I think it would look nicer if you show a trace of one other color in the shioren and the couch, it makes the picture more... ...integrated?
- I think you couls use something that goes out of the field of view for broadening the composition, something that juts out.
other than that, I give it 9/10.
http://www.fanart-central.net/pictures.php?pid=312438
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